Selasa, 11 Mei 2010

#1 Essay: Is Homework a Burden or a Benefit?

I wrote this topic about two weeks ago, and I think it's pretty cool. Maybe this is the best essay I've ever made, I'm so proud of this.
This entry is going to be in two parts, the first part is the original version, and the second part would be a corrected version. Oh, and I'll highlight the corrected words too, on a corrected version.
Anyway, hope you enjoy it.

Original version:
Is homework a Burden or a Benefit?

    Homework is given to students to measure their ability and to improve their aptitude. Having said that, the majority of homeworks is a complete burden. Why?

    Homework is given to improve students' knowledge and thinking skills, but most of the homeworks do not have this. For example, a biology teacher gives students a bunch of homework that all the answers had clearly been stated on the textbook. When this thing happens, the real homework of the students is to rewrite the answers on an answer sheet. This kind of homework does not improve anything on students.

    However, homework can be a real benefit to students. A beneficial homework is a homework that stokes up students' creativity and new ideas. For example, an English teacher told students to write and essay with a particular topic that is relevant to their life. This kind of homework does not only improve students' creativity and thinking skills, it also raises up the students' interest on learning and studying new things.

    Therefore, homeworks are totally a burden and a time waster unless they gives students a chance to think for themselves.

Corrected version:
Is homework a Burden or a Benefit?

    Homework is given to students to measure their ability and to improve their aptitude. Having said that, the majority of homework is a complete burden. Why?

    Homework is given to improve students' knowledge and thinking skills, but most of the homework do not have this. For example, a biology teacher gives students a bunch of homework that all the answers had clearly been stated on the textbook. When this thing happens, the real homework of the students is to rewrite the answers on an answer sheet. This kind of homework does not improve anything for the students.

    However, homework can be a real benefit to students. A beneficial assignment is homework that stimulates students' creativity and new ideas. For example, an English teacher told students to write and essay with a particular topic that is relevant to their life. This kind of homework does not only improve students' creativity and thinking skills, it also arouses the students' interest in learning and studying new things.

    Therefore, assignments are totally a burden and a time waster unless they gives students a chance to think for themselves.

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My teacher's comment: When you want to count homework, you use 'assignment', not 'homework'.



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